USING A THESAURUS TO HELP STUDENTS IMPROVE THEIR CHOICE OF WORDS

Original Draft

On the first day, we met our class teacher Mr Wong, we thought he would be very strict to us. After one week, we found Mr Wong was very nice! We like this secondary school and we like to be in 1A. This is a good school and 1A is very good. The teachers in this school are very kind and nice and our classmates are also kind, friendly and nice. We like each other very much.

Edited Version

On the first day, we met our class teacher Mr Wong, we thought he would be very strict to us. After one week, we found Mr Wong was very pleasant! We adore this secondary school and we are proud to be in 1A. This is a brilliant school and 1A is a fantastic class. The teachers in this school are very kind and helpful and our classmates are also kind, friendly and considerate. We cherish each other very much.